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【栏目要求】

1.将学生习作根据中考分值给出成绩; 2.在应该修改的地方划线并标注序号;

3.根据所标序号进行修改并说明修改的理由; 4.给学生习作点评〈优点与不足〉;

5.请点评名师提供简历一份，包括：学校、职务、职称、荣誉、教研教学成果、照片一张。

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来稿请寄：430079华中师范大学外国语学院《中学生英语》杂志社 收

本期点评名师

于孔春中学高级教师，1976年9月出生，1998年毕业于山东聊城大学，后一直担任初中英语的教学工作；从教以来，努力工作，不断进取，大胆探索教学改革的新路子、新方法，积极参加市县两级组织的教学教研活动，取得了优异成绩；2004年5月被评为梁山县第六届优秀教育工作者；2010年5月被评为梁山县教学能手；2014年9月，荣获济宁市优秀班主任荣誉称号；先后在国家级、省级报刊上发表教学论文二十多篇；辅导的学生多次在市县两级竞赛中获奖。

The River Is Clean Again

Last summer holiday,I paid a visit for①my friend who lived near the Songjin River. When walking across a bridge,I saw a group of students sitting by the river and drawing pictures.The river was clean with small flowers and grass on all②sides.The air was fresh and many people took walks,talking happily under the trees.

But it used to be a black river and there was a lot of rubbish floating on the water,which gave off a terrible smell.By the end of 2010,the river had been clean and there had been a lot of living things in it.But with the development of industry,the river became dirty.At that time,people there wished the river could be clean again.

Fortunately,in the past two years,the government has paid much attention to the project of cleaning the river and spent a lot of money in③it.Through painstaking effort,the river is now clean again.How nice the clean river is!

We’ll try our best to keep it cleaning④for ever.We hope that everyone will protect water and keep water clean because we only have one earth.

山东梁山扬营中学九年级 李海

1.优点:

文章用了前后对比的手段强调了河水由脏变清的过程，结尾处得出结论：我们要珍惜保护水资源，保护我们居住的环境。文章简洁明了，层次清楚。

2.需要修改的地方：

①for改为to。pay a visit to...意思是“访问……；拜访……”。

②all改为both。all指三者，both指两者。

③in改为on。spend...on...意思是“在……方面花费……”。

④cleaning改为clean。keep sth.adj.意思是“保持……”。

3.评分：

按中考英语作文满分15分的评分标准，本文修改前可得12分。董淑晴?

出生日期：2000年11月12日

爱好：唱歌

座右铭：自信是成功的第一秘诀。

就读学校班级：江苏省连云港市罗阳中学初三（5）班

指导老师：王桂馨

I Like Going to School by Bike

I think going to school by bike is good for us.

First of all,riding to school is a wonderful way to exercise and it’s good for our health. Next,it’s fun to ride together with friends every day.What’s more,if we ride bikes,our parents won’t have to drive us to school.There will be fewer cars in the city.Less driving helps to make our city cleaner.I hope more and more students will go to school on foot.But we must be careful while riding.Safety always comes first.刘权基好学

出生日期：2001年12月23日

爱好：唱歌

座右铭：理想是人生的太阳。

就读学校班级：江苏省赣榆县罗阳中学九（1）班

指导老师：陈传光

My Mother’s Diary

I used to be a naughty boy and my mother used to be angry with me.Now I’d like to say I’ve changed a lot.In fact,that is because of my mother’s diary.

One day I saw my mother’s diary by accident while I was looking for my notebook.I was curious and couldn’t help reading it.In her diary,she showed her deep love for me. She also expressed her disappointment when I made mistakes.She said she loved me so much and she believed I could be a good boy.I couldn’t help crying after reading my mother’s diary.

Since that day,I have changed a lot.I work hard and help with some housework.Now I feel I’ve grown up.